Pertaining to this verse below of a song I'm working on, my question is: Could rain actually come or be seen to be coming from a fiery sky? (I'm thinking sunset here)
I like the way it flows, but it needs to be "MC". I am biased and need another opinion, so please feel free to chime in!
Cryin' comes easy
When you're crossin' the plains
Fiery sky full of nothing
'Cept the promise of rain
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I would have to say yes. In fact, cannot it not rain and be sunny at the same time? I know I have seen it. So, yes rain can come from a fiery sky. However, it is usually in line (a precursor) with a terrible thunderstorm. The sunniest skies often bring the worst storms. So, how's that for a little MC?
yes it is called verga and can be seen against a darkening sky, particularly when back lit by sunsets
some call it a squall line
yeah, I don't see a problem here...although if it works with the meter, I'd be tempted to put an adjective in front of "rain"...
Not positive "fiery" matches the meter you established in the first line. "Cry-in" has the emphasis on the first syllable; "fier-y" has the emphasis on the second. How about just saying "with a":
Cryin' comes easy
When you're crossin' the plains
With a sky full of nothing
'Cept the promise of rain
BTW, nice lyric.
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